I ran to that sound to find the boys yelling that huddled in a circle i push and manovered my way in the circle to find robert in the middle huddled in a little ball. He was crying and Sniveling for help.
" help! stop! please!'' Robert shouted contuinsly.
i could not bare but not to see this so i went out of the circle. Then jumped right back in the infinite boys wold not let me in i pushed and shoved as much as i could but nothing there was to many. When i saw jack he gave me a incredulous look and i knew i must chant along if i want to be respected so i went with it and i heard my self saying with the crowd!
''Kill him KIll him!"
jack picked up his spear and was trying to intimadte robert he was still curled up and i was hoping for this to stop as my hand waved slowly and glided through he warm wind hiting my hand while it was in a fist formation ready to punch.
i looked forward and saw jack i looked left and at a faint distance sam n eric and on my right there was ralph cheering like jack also holding a speer. i could not comprehend this he was our leader but he was stuping down to jacks level. i couldn't decide weither he was doing this because he wanted to be respected by the hunters or because he really wanted this to happen. I i always wanted him to be leader but now my views are diffrent.
I thought to my self how lucky i was to not be robert. As the fight died down i felt the urge of killing a pig not robert but a pig. i was becoming infuriated.
we continued up the hill going by the jungle dodging the sharp vines hiding very covertly in the grating jungle. after a while we some boys started to converse about piggy which lead to them leaving. There was me ralph and jack we stood there blunderingly waiting to be spoted but nothing. The we continued up the hill which seemed infinite i wanted to go back to the beach but that was a sagely idea so i went with them until we had finally got to the fire and we stood there for a while. we sat down on a big log and i heard a noise and so did ralph but not jack. then i saw it the beast but jack and ralph started yelling at me knew he would be uncompromising. but then i made them go look with me and we went up the hill further sweating and panting like dogs even thought it was dark. we saw a figure but no one said anything but we all knew it was the beast. then it moved further up and ralph said it was a ape while i was running nimble down to the beach and jumping over bushes and grubes it felt likeas if i was flying down a hill.
2 comments:
Hey, it's Katie
I thought your blog was very detailed and I could really feel how Roger was feeling. The only thing you need to work on is your punctuation.Like capitulation's in the beginning of the sentence and the characters names. Some of the vocabulary words were used wrongly, but only a few. Overall, this was a nice and descriptive blog.
I really liked how you used the word infuriated, I thought it was a very descriptive sentence and really showed how Roger was feeling at that moment..
"As the fight died down i felt the urge of killing a pig not robert but a pig. i was becoming infuriated."
When you describe the sight on top of the hill maybe you could add what Roger is thinking as he looks around for the beast. Is he scared?
I think you did a good job adding detail into this blog, and I enjoyed reading it.
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