Wednesday, January 30, 2008

blog 2 The fire of hope



I walked up slowly and carefully. While grasping the conch as if it was my life  the other kids nimble up the mountain with a swift and smooth movement. When the boy's got to the top of the mountain i was about have way and i started to pant like a dog. But i saw the boy's gather warped wood and put in a triangluar shape but could not start a fire. when i got there the sun made a bright glance in my eyes and i shut my eyes from the bright sun and. That second jack ripped my spectacles off my face. The i could see ralph and the others slightly tilt my glasses so the sun's heat was magnified. Then i saw a some smoke and it quickly turned into a fire with the boys could barley keep it maintained with out it catching the whole island on fire. Then ralph gave me my spectacles back and when i put them back on i glared at him giving me a scornfully look  and having my spectacles back gave me a irresistible erg of power i must do something or this fire is going to get out of hand. since i had the conch i thought i had the power to speak but every  time i told them some thing all they said was
 " shut up piggy."
 "shut up fatty."
 "shut up" 
But i didn't i keep on trying to stop the fire but they all thought it was a fire of hope they thought as long as the fire is going there is hope for civilization.  I tried to be officious but they would not listen no matter what. Then my spectacles blur up again as the boys make a tumult and i see the orange fire spred to a tree and i say
 " there needs to be more order in this place or we will fall apart"

1 comment:

Emma Christenfeld said...

Daniel,
Can you extend the blog and mention his thoughts about the little kid with the birth mark? Some capitalization and spelling corrections are necessary.
-Emma